Thoughtful, in-depth feedback to help your story reach its full potential.

Receive comprehensive developmental feedback on your chapter book or junior fiction manuscript before you submit to agents, publishers or competitions, or self-publish.

This service includes:

• Full manuscript read

• High-level in-text comments and suggestions (using Word tracked changes and comments)

• 4–6 page editorial report covering elements such as:

  • concept and hook

  • opening chapter impact

  • pacing

  • character development

  • humour and voice

  • age suitability

  • plot and structure

  • dialogue

  • ending and emotional payoff

  • commercial strengths and opportunities

• Prioritised action plan to guide you in your next steps

• One follow-up email where you can ask additional questions

What to expect: You'll receive developmental feedback. That is, feedback on the big-picture elements of your story, including structure, pacing, character, voice and reader engagement, rather than proofreading or copy editing.

This assessment is designed for completed manuscripts of up to 15,000 words. Please wait until you've finished a full draft before booking. If your story is longer than 15,000 words, please contact Suzanne for a quote.

Perfect for: Writers who have revised their manuscript and are ready for detailed, developmental feedback that will help them strengthen their story and prioritise their next round of revisions.

Current turnaround: Approximately 10 to 15 business days

Already revised with AI? Many people use AI for brainstorming, refining ideas or spotting surface-level issues, but it can’t replace the insight of an experienced children’s editor who understands storytelling craft, young readers, emotional connection and publishing expectations.

Human judgement is needed to go beyond generic suggestions and truly understand why a story works, whether a character feels authentic, when a plot needs more tension, or which changes will strengthen a manuscript without losing the writer’s unique voice.

Your story is uniquely yours. I’d love to help you transform it into the strongest, most engaging version it can be.