Thoughtful, in-depth feedback to help your story reach its full potential.

Receive comprehensive developmental feedback on your chapter book or junior fiction manuscript before you submit to agents, publishers or competitions, or self-publish.

This service includes:

• Full manuscript read

• High-level in-text comments and suggestions (using Word tracked changes and comments)

• 4–6 page editorial report covering elements such as:

  • concept and hook

  • opening chapter impact

  • pacing

  • character development

  • humour and voice

  • age suitability

  • plot and structure

  • dialogue

  • ending and emotional payoff

  • commercial strengths and opportunities

• Prioritised action plan to guide you in your next steps

• One follow-up email where you can ask additional questions

What to expect: You'll receive developmental feedback. That is, feedback on the big-picture elements of your story, including structure, pacing, character, voice and reader engagement, rather than proofreading or copy editing.

This assessment is designed for completed manuscripts of up to 15,000 words. Please wait until you've finished a full draft before booking. If your story is longer than 15,000 words, please contact Suzanne for a quote.

Perfect for: Writers who have revised their manuscript and are ready for detailed, developmental feedback that will help them strengthen their story and prioritise their next round of revisions.

Current turnaround: Approximately 10 to 15 business days

A note on AI and children's writing: I believe children's stories should be created by people, not generated by AI. While technology can have a place in organising ideas or handling practical tasks, the storytelling, language and creative decisions should remain the writer's own.

My assessments are grounded in human judgement, a deep understanding of children's books and a respect for each writer's unique voice. I work with writers on their own creative work, not AI-generated or AI-rewritten manuscripts.